My Brothers Birthday
It was a clear Tuesday morning; the birds were chirping and the leaves were falling. Suddenly I heard someone thumping down the stairs loudly. Not long after I heard the thumping, I heard a little voice coming out of nowhere. I realised that I had heard that voice before. It was my brothers. Soon after, I heard more thumping so I went to investigate. Suddenly I saw Mum, Dad and my and my brother Kaiden. Not long after I reached a few steps, I remembered. It was my brothers BIRTHDAY! So I trotted back upstairs tiredly. As I moaned, I jumped back into my warm, comfy bed. I managed to quietly drift off, but...
"Sophie Kaidens going to open his birthday presents one!" Yelled mum. I woke up in fright I moaned for a long time. Seriously I'll show you how.
"mmmmmmmmmmmmm" told you! Ok anyway let's get on with it. I moaned, thumped and even fell down the stairs. Finally he finished opening them. I mean, how would he know what he got? He just rips, rips and does some more ripping. Kaiden doesn't even bother to look at his presents, he just throws them to the side. Later he something outside. It was... A MOTORBIKE!
"Do you want to start motor cross?" Asked mum.
"YES!" Said Kaiden excitedly.
"Well you have all the gear" I muttered.
I have been working on making my writing more descriptive. I want to improve my writing by using punctuation properly.
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